Rufus
by Sam
My character in Detectives in Togas is Rufus. The book was written by Henry Winterfeld and the story happened in ancient Rome. It is about the adventures of seven boys who went to Xanthos School together: Mucius, Cauis, Rufus, Publius, Julius, Flavius, and Antonius. All these young boys were a pupil of Xanthos.
My name is Rufus and the story began in class one day when I wrote “Caius is a Dumbbell” on one of my writing tablets. I then hang the sign behind my teacher’s desk for the whole class to see. I was angry at Caius for distracting me while I was studying. When Caius saw the tablet, he was furious and called me a son of a coward. I adore my father, Marcus Praetonius, who was a famous general at that time. My father had just lost an important battle, and so I was deeply humiliated with Caius’ words. We started to fight in the middle of the class. Xanthos whose nickname was Xantippus was very angry at us for fighting.
A few days after the fight with Cauis, I discovered that Tellus was pretending to be a soothsayer like Lukos. Lukos was a famous astrologist and seer who lived in front of our school. Tellus did not want to be arrested so he engraved “Caius is a Dumbbell” in the Temple of Minerva which was dedicated to the Emperor. He wanted me to be arrested instead. When two guards saw this, they immediately told it to the senator. Cauis blamed me for writing in the Temple of Minerva because of what happened in school.
The next day all the other boys went to school and noticed that I was missing along with our teacher, and Cauis. Mucius, Antonius, Julius, Flavius, and Publius kept on hearing a groan in the nearby apartment where Xanthos lived, and which was next to our classroom. Finally they looked around and found that the groan came from within a closet in the room. When they opened the closet they found our teacher in it. Xanthos told them that he was robbed and locked in the closet. After they heard our teacher’s story, my friends started their investigation.
I was actually in prison the entire the time my friends were wondering where I was. One day I wanted to send a message to my friends at school. So I told a servant to tell my friends to “tear the sheep’s clothing off a red wolf”. I was able to tell the servant before the guards started beating me. Back at Xanthos School, the servant hastily told everyone my message but no one could figure out what it meant.
My friends’ investigation led to Tellus whom they saw one day going into a bakery. Mucius and the others dashed through the back door where they saw two buildings: on the left building was the Baths of Diana while on the right was Lukos’ house. They saw Tellus waiting inside the house but when they entered the house they saw Lukos counting money. Lukos saw them and shut all the doors so they couldn’t go out.
All my friends jumped at Lukos but finally, Cauis punched him and knocked him out. Mucius then said that Lukos actually meant wolf and that the sign outside was in the color red. Lukos also had hair that was like sheep’s wool. When Lukos awoke he told everything that he wrote and that he pretended to be a soothsayer.
They discovered that Tellus wrote “Caius is a Dumbbell” and released me to my friends. Tellus was not arrested though, but killed because he was trying to escape. He fell into the Baths of Diana where there was no water in neither of the pools.
My name is Rufus and the story began in class one day when I wrote “Caius is a Dumbbell” on one of my writing tablets. I then hang the sign behind my teacher’s desk for the whole class to see. I was angry at Caius for distracting me while I was studying. When Caius saw the tablet, he was furious and called me a son of a coward. I adore my father, Marcus Praetonius, who was a famous general at that time. My father had just lost an important battle, and so I was deeply humiliated with Caius’ words. We started to fight in the middle of the class. Xanthos whose nickname was Xantippus was very angry at us for fighting.
A few days after the fight with Cauis, I discovered that Tellus was pretending to be a soothsayer like Lukos. Lukos was a famous astrologist and seer who lived in front of our school. Tellus did not want to be arrested so he engraved “Caius is a Dumbbell” in the Temple of Minerva which was dedicated to the Emperor. He wanted me to be arrested instead. When two guards saw this, they immediately told it to the senator. Cauis blamed me for writing in the Temple of Minerva because of what happened in school.
The next day all the other boys went to school and noticed that I was missing along with our teacher, and Cauis. Mucius, Antonius, Julius, Flavius, and Publius kept on hearing a groan in the nearby apartment where Xanthos lived, and which was next to our classroom. Finally they looked around and found that the groan came from within a closet in the room. When they opened the closet they found our teacher in it. Xanthos told them that he was robbed and locked in the closet. After they heard our teacher’s story, my friends started their investigation.
I was actually in prison the entire the time my friends were wondering where I was. One day I wanted to send a message to my friends at school. So I told a servant to tell my friends to “tear the sheep’s clothing off a red wolf”. I was able to tell the servant before the guards started beating me. Back at Xanthos School, the servant hastily told everyone my message but no one could figure out what it meant.
My friends’ investigation led to Tellus whom they saw one day going into a bakery. Mucius and the others dashed through the back door where they saw two buildings: on the left building was the Baths of Diana while on the right was Lukos’ house. They saw Tellus waiting inside the house but when they entered the house they saw Lukos counting money. Lukos saw them and shut all the doors so they couldn’t go out.
All my friends jumped at Lukos but finally, Cauis punched him and knocked him out. Mucius then said that Lukos actually meant wolf and that the sign outside was in the color red. Lukos also had hair that was like sheep’s wool. When Lukos awoke he told everything that he wrote and that he pretended to be a soothsayer.
They discovered that Tellus wrote “Caius is a Dumbbell” and released me to my friends. Tellus was not arrested though, but killed because he was trying to escape. He fell into the Baths of Diana where there was no water in neither of the pools.
The End
Very good
ReplyDeleteI HAVE CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISIM
ReplyDeleteThere are a few problems, though.
Problem #1) a fellow prisoner, not a slave told them about the sheep/wolf thing
Problem #2) Caius didn't punch out Lukos. He hit him on the head with a stool after Lukos punched him.
Problem #3) you forgot the part about the Praetonians
Problem #4) " " about Mucius going into the Baths of Diana.
Other than these problems, it was good. You are a very talented writer, and I am impressed with this, especially if you wrote this paper all by yourself.
Good job!
ReplyDeletei kinda need more of it
ReplyDeletethis one is in okay